![]() ![]() GOH: APPROACH SUPPLICANT AND LET US SEE THY SACRIFICE! SL: Well uh, I have this. Please state the nature of the religious emergency? We are always there to serve prospective worshipers. You know what with you and Koba proclaiming my imminent triumph I feel this is going to end up like on of _those_ sentences. I just gotta have more cowbell footnotes. ![]() Clearly, if I ever write something else, I'll need to make sure that I put in more footnotes. I love that program to pieces, I really do, but its support for footnotes is of the devil. I remember first figuring out that books do, inevitably, end when I was a child. Although, knowing Australian fauna, the gods might decide I was trying to kill them instead of worship them. Any chance of borrowing some writing skills and focus from GOH Divinity Services (I sure there are some livestock nearby that I can sacrifice to the gods ). If this doesn't make the featured box / EQD then there is something terribly wrong with this reality. The longest chapter, chapter three, only had two and chapter four had none at all! Clearly this heinous act on the behalf of the author cannot go unpunished. The harshest criticism I can give is that the footnotes (endnotes? Who cares for technicalities? THIS IS PONIES!) seemed to dry up towards the end. The smidgen of eldritch abominations and weaponized spreads and desserts certainly didn't hurt either. The best part for me was how you seamlessly inserted the reader into the heads of characters and let their natural reactions to the situations drive the humour. The humour was top notch, and as others have said, reminiscent of such masters as Pratchett and Adams. It of course did what all good stories do and left me wanting more material to feed my insatiable addiction. Not too short and feeling rushed and not too long and starting to strain the concept. It had me going: 2.bp./-LO4qcGPBLbs/Twy圆8HezFI/AAAAAAAAak0/_o7mHmjgaiU/s1600/110087+-+artist+zlack3r+artist+zlacker+book+crying+filly+sad+twilight_sparkle.pngĪlthough, I think that for the idea behind the story, it was pretty much the perfect length. In seriousness, a) politics is a dirty business, here or in Equestria, b) the views of the characters aren't necessarily those of the author c) Sky Slicer had it coming.ġ394610 I really did. No no no, Dotted is just expressing how sad, nay, despondent he would be if details about the Cypress Hall project were to leak (the cabinet is like a sieve these days, it really is, makes you wonder what the world's coming to, it really does) to certain papers leading to the Honorable Member being unseated. ![]() Then again, real honest-to-goodness published books have typos, so I shouldn't be surprised.ġ395578 Blackmail! Such an ugly word. I'm just amazed they survived the scrutiny this thing was put through. Because lying is wrong.Īh, the wonders of not relying on dead trees as a publishing medium. I would be lying if I said I wasn't thinking of other ways to erode Dotted's dwindling reserves of sanity. It's unusual to see a story which centers around OCs be so engaging, but I would happily read more about the Civil Service ponies and their endless struggle against generalized idiocy. Tl dr: Wonderful! Nitpicking! More please!īrilliant! It was very reminiscent of reading Pratchett, and not just because of the footnotes. As long, of course, the princess is happy. The moment he saw her he knew-the princess was here, and nothing can go wrong anymore. And one, a certain Ivory Abacus, was too occupied watching the cabinet secretary pivot trough the air to get any distance in. " said Lady Cloudsdale, her tone suggestive. "That she has come, Dotted? That's what we fear. Here are the three I found, listed for your editing convenience.ġ. Yes, all three of them! And in all seriousness, I really only noticed these little things because this is one of the most technically perfect fics (as far as my American public school abilities can detect) that I've ever come across on this site. Instead I'll point out all of your typos like a total jerk. In the meantime, I would offer feedback to help you improve as a writer if I could, but you're working well over my skill level. Brilliant! It was very reminiscent of reading Pratchett, and not just because of the footnotes. ![]()
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